Cool Poem about Kage-Maru

As you probably know, I think Kage is just great, so I have written a poem about him, it is called...

The Dark Wanderer

I have travelled so far with by sword by my side
Over cruel seas we shall seldom glide
If attacked we shall be, no fear will I show
For my sword shall protect me, through hail and snow
Across islands I walk, and mountains I climb
Through air in great ships, so sweet and sublime
But once I have travelled, to every edge
To every corner, I tell you now of my pledge
I shall persevere through the bad and the good
For my sword shall protect me, no change in my mood
No fate cannot change me
Destiny shall not sway me
With my blade by my side, I will not give up
I need not of money, of drink in a mug
For I am the dark wanderer, robed and thin
My blade shall protect me, forever in our eternal sin...

Do you like it?

 

Do you like it?

NO! /versus/images/icons/smile.gif Heh, just kidding... it's cool, at least something original.

 

It's nice Lionrulz77. Indeed unique however, I feel it's in the wrong section.

 

whoa, not bad at all.

good shit man.





ps. hmm i've never posted so many posts in one day! wtf

 

its a good poem /versus/images/icons/wink.gif
thogh i don't understand the last line? is it just a rhyme filler?

 

Yep, you are right, I couldn't think of any other words to write for the last line(but don't you agree it sort of goes with whole Kage's mother = Dural don't you think?)
Thanks anyway!

 

hmm, a tip with the last line, remove either "forever" or "our".
it doesn't fit quite right.

 

Man, that was deep, but too bad that i hate Kage

 

ROTFLOL!!! Man, that's more of a samurai poem, not a ninja one!! /versus/images/icons/laugh.gif /versus/images/icons/laugh.gif /versus/images/icons/laugh.gif /versus/images/icons/laugh.gif I usually don't use kage's sword to kill my opponents, do you? LOLOL!!! It's not a bad poem all right, but it's kind of non sense to me..

(JACKY)

 

Wow! I'm glad so many of you like it, I think I will change it a little eventually, but for now, enjoy it while you can! /versus/images/icons/grin.gif

 

Okay, just to learn a bit how to get around here... /versus/images/graemlins/tongue.gif That poem is nice, how about something about Lion (according to your nick)? Kind of "invinvicible mantis fighter.... I can't think of any brighter..." /versus/images/graemlins/wink.gif ,

 

First off, wouldn't "every battle I shall win" or something similar be a better ending? Instead of something that makes no sense. There are a couple of other lines that make no sense either, like the one about the sea. Which basically says "I wont go over the see very often". Deep stuff.......... /versus/images/graemlins/crazy.gif Can't be bothered clicking back to re-read it so I'll leave it at that.

The middle part was pretty cool.

 

Pst, this thread is almost a year old... /versus/images/graemlins/tongue.gif

 

Re: Cool Poem about Kage-Maru

I saw the one at the top of this page and figured the whole thing was fairly recent. Oh well, the guy might still read what I said.

 

He wasn't actually talking to you.

 

Don't care.

 

Nice post edit.

I'll mind my own business.

 

You do that.

 

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New blood in town /versus/images/graemlins/grin.gif

 

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